Some story and shot feedback:
-Establishing shot, separate the poster and the fly more
-potentially have the fly on the poster leaf and then it flies away, camera moves to reveal it's a poster
-potentially remove all shots where Girl is evil
-create a multi-faucet shot for Spider's eyes
-pacing is too fast (shots longer, more holds in actions)
-more cartoon-y actions otherwise the last shot is out of place
-more focus on girl's POV
-end shot have the girl drawing spider
-end shot have spider on inside of room
-Girl's character arch not clear/strong enough
-door too dark, lighter room set
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